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Broken by ~f3ark1t:iconf3ark1t:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Human Nature > Spoken Word


I can’t breathe
I want to but no air comes out
I want to speak but no words come out
Why do I feel... hurt?

I feel betray
I feel like love had forgotten me
Like God only help those who have love

My heart hurts
My heart feels like a thousand needles went through my chest
and now it’s bleeding slowly for me to die

Why
Why when I try to move my hands to touch the ground I can't
Touch the ground
Just to know it’s still there
Just to know I am still alive

Broken
I feel like a broken doll
Shatter into pieces
Pieces all over the floor
With no one there to put me back together
...no one...
Will fix me
No one will love me
No one will help me breath
not feel things that is real
not to even to tell me that I’m alive
©2005-2009 ~f3ark1t
:iconf3ark1t:

Author's Comments

I don't know what to put this under.. This poem is more like speaking.. it's about a broken heart really
I wanted to sound more like talking because I want people to feel emotion in it.

..This is a good way to read it.
Read it like you are talking to someone. Read is fast and try to feel what the meaning is. ..
It's not good I know but I hope you like it.

Comments


love 3 3 joy 0 0 wow 0 0 mad 0 0 sad 3 3 fear 1 1 neutral 0 0
:icondragonrider03:
~DragonRider03 Oct 6, 2005, 3:33:46 PM
Wow that really moves me... Some parts were like you wrote it for me, like you reached into my soul & rippied out the words... I MUST fav!
:iconf3ark1t:
~f3ark1t Oct 6, 2005, 3:44:01 PM
^^; Thanks I am glad that you like it.

--
To be a beautiful person is not to change your appearance.. but it's to love yourself.. and not care about what others think.
:icondarkphilospher:
~DaRkPhIlOsPheR Oct 7, 2005, 1:19:34 AM
another great work dear :hug: just keep it up! :hug:

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To Love Is To Receive A Glimpse Of Heaven =Karen Sunde=
:iconf3ark1t:
~f3ark1t Oct 7, 2005, 2:16:52 AM
Thanks :hug:

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To be a beautiful person is not to change your appearance.. but it's to love yourself.. and not care about what others think.
:icontrivial-ari:
~trivial-ari Oct 7, 2005, 9:46:35 PM
yea what they said its great

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~Scorching the Blood in my Vampire Heart~
:icondarkphilospher:
~DaRkPhIlOsPheR Oct 8, 2005, 3:58:59 AM
np^_^

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To Love Is To Receive A Glimpse Of Heaven =Karen Sunde=
:iconlilna:
~lilna Oct 8, 2005, 10:31:00 PM
love the language u've used. Very emotional. :heart:

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:frail: ...Lena. :
:iconf3ark1t:
~f3ark1t Oct 9, 2005, 7:15:08 AM
Thanks
:hug:

--
To be a beautiful person is not to change your appearance.. but it's to love yourself.. and not care about what others think.
:iconf3ark1t:
~f3ark1t Oct 9, 2005, 10:34:29 AM
^^

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To be a beautiful person is not to change your appearance.. but it's to love yourself.. and not care about what others think.
:iconiyako:
~Iyako Oct 11, 2005, 9:03:54 PM
Nice job.

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"If you live life with no purpose, then you're already dead."-Kiba [wolf's rain]
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