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I can’t breathe
I want to but no air comes out
I want to speak but no words come out
Why do I feel... hurt?

I feel betray
I feel like love had forgotten me
Like God only help those who have love

My heart hurts
My heart feels like a thousand needles went through my chest
and now it’s bleeding slowly for me to die

Why
Why when I try to move my hands to touch the ground I can't
Touch the ground
Just to know it’s still there
Just to know I am still alive

Broken
I feel like a broken doll
Shatter into pieces
Pieces all over the floor
With no one there to put me back together
...no one...
Will fix me
No one will love me
No one will help me breath
not feel things that is real
not to even to tell me that I’m alive
I don't know what to put this under.. This poem is more like speaking.. it's about a broken heart really
I wanted to sound more like talking because I want people to feel emotion in it.

..This is a good way to read it.
Read it like you are talking to someone. Read is fast and try to feel what the meaning is. ..
It's not good I know but I hope you like it.
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:iconfernezco:
Fernezco Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2015
beautiful...
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:iconrenaisangel:
RenaisAngel Featured By Owner Edited Aug 24, 2014  Student General Artist
I feel it, u did a great job
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nicoxmel Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2014  Hobbyist Artist
。。。{(-_-)}
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sparklekitty12 Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2014
its beauitful i love it good work!
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BeccaMacD141 Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This is... amazing. I can totally relate to it
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RebeccaHardingArt Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
This is how I feel...
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Treestorm Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2013  Student Digital Artist
This is how i feel right now :iconbrokenheartplz:
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HisCountryBumpkin Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
its amazing, you have a lot of talent
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JakeTruong Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013
this is so true to me now :)
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:iconanubisgirl13:
anubisgirl13 Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2013
I cried after I read this! I just love this *sniff* *sniff*
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kotobuki1 Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
beautiful
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Alice45665 Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2012
its really good~ If you used stronger words im sure i would have cried~~~ lol ~ im a crybaby when it comes to romance and poetry~~~
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LoveCoresAskAccount Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2012
I feel it....
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RohitkSinha Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2012  Hobbyist Interface Designer
niceee!!
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Monkey610 Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
I Read This Poem And it Reminds Me Of My Crush, He Likes Me Too But Now Whenever He Sees My Friend He Runs Off With Her. :saddummy: :depressed: It Makes Me Feel Used Look At The Top Left Is Pretty Much What I Feel ;(
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GrimAsEver Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012  Student Writer
I love it, seriously.
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KikiElric Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2012  Student General Artist
I love this. it has so much deep meaning and the way you express it is lovely. I feel this way, like my hearts being tortured but no one notices, or if they do, then no one cares. this is wonderful.
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mistyfan45 Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I love this <3 I am broken heart But I feel no emotion only broken. Perfect this is just perfect ~
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QueenEvethe7th Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2012
so true my heart is just broken.No one wants to fix or help me they just leave me brokenheartplz
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Silver--Fang Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2012
I kinda like it
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:iconactress115:
actress115 Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
i feel that now.... i wish he could see what he is putting me through...... but i cant..... :iconbrokenheartplz:
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novelist888 Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2012
I love this. Well besides that, I am creating a website about a sci-fi galaxy. The website will be a bookstore for books about this galaxy. Already, in a few months, I have about ten writers interested. I hope you also will be interested. Well if you are, contact me.
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CrowParker Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2012
omg i love this so much <3 :iconlovelyplz:
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Delphi-is-Script Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2011  Hobbyist
Poetry like that is called slam poetry. It's meant to be read by the poet to an audience. It's usually full of complex, personal meanings. There's your daily dose of definitions. Lovely poem, by the way.
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DoubleHeart97 Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2011  Student
This is so beautiful :heart:
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ThunderStarStorm Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2011  Student General Artist
It would go under "free verse" for the poetry type and emotive like this - Literature / Poetry / Emotional / Free Verse kk?
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chocolatedesires Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2011
This definitely touched me. Beautiful :woohoo:
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Blooooood Featured By Owner May 26, 2011
It really touched my heart!! It's really beautiful! ^^
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ToWriteLoveOnMyHeart Featured By Owner May 15, 2011  Student General Artist
Do you mind if I put this up in my locker?

I really really like this ♥ I feel like this everyday, except for the occassional smile ):
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dawigginton Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2011
I'm really feeling this right now man... I recently lost my GF of over 4 years...
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CON-SWAY-LA Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2011
<3<3
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ohanzeetokala Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2011   Digital Artist
i know this..... feeling every day i wake up this is what i feel i love it im not emo but this is what i feel all day long

this is a fav
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draysk Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2011   Writer
I really like this alot:) This is great.
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EmmysEscape Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2010
This is so beautifully honest and heatwrenching thank you for this... it really hit me hard cuz im not good at putting my emotions into words but this really was...beautiful..
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NightlyAngelicChica Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2010  Hobbyist Digital Artist
this is amazing work. exactly how i feel right now. my bf dumped me and 5 hours later wants me back! he is dating my best friend and he said that he would dump her for me. i told him to f*ck off!

this speaks to me. its truely amazing. pure poetry. instsfave.
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bridget117 Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
ok. Whatev to you saying it's not good. It's exactly what I'm feeling right now.
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Bryce-africa Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2010
sad but beautiful. It reflects how im feeling atm. good work
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bleeding-blade Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
beautiful.
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hopie123 Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2010
im fav.
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MaximumXrideXfax Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2010
This is really good, almost exactly my words today! Fav :D
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Paradoxdcode Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2010  Hobbyist Digital Artist
HTis describes me perfectly [link] now
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kasuka414 Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2010
I love this poem!
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Coffee-Fae Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2010  Student Photographer
this is totally me right now
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amberlynn220 Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2010
Wow... That was just Wow.
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Fiery-Chaos Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2010
My gosh, I almost cried. That's everything I felt in words that just wouldn't fully come out.
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jadeybabey77 Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2010
This really relates to me.
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:iconmyahugs:
MyaHugs Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2010
This is really good. I love it and feel the same way:tears:
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Dont-Ask-N-Dont-Tell Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2010  Student General Artist
Beautiful <3
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Shuuchi Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2010  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I can relate, this very instant. Recently had my love lost. Very powerful emotions.
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spicycoco Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2010  Hobbyist Photographer
I really like it!
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